Tag, I'm it

Darn it! Renee tagged me, by way of Alice. I know resistance is futile, so here goes.

Here are Alice's rules.

We’re playing Telephone again, only this time I’m going to call it “Whisper.”

What you do is make a change in the paragraph below. It can be as little as a single word or almost every word, so long as we can still recognize the paragraph you received. I’m talking about the one in the blog of the person who tagged you, not the original paragraph. Tag three people, and link to them. Also link to the person who tagged you so the chain will not be broken! Now go to the original paragraph at http://aliceaudrey.wordpress.com/2008/05/11/whisper and let Alice know you did it. She will link to you. For extra credit, head over to http://AliceAudrey.wordpress.com around June 9th for the contest based on this meme. You could win a $20 gift certificate.

Here's my paragraph.

He came from Saturn's third moon, stardust in one hand and a bill in the other. His name was Rivo, but she’d always called him Jack. She said she liked his deep, gravelly voice. Instead of kissing her he pinched her bottom and picked her pocket, and ran off with the girl who worked at Target.

Who to tag ... who to tag ... oh, let's tag Tessa, CM, and Ericka!